Wow! I see a document so anti-censorship that no proof-reader was involved. Here are a few issues with the proposed bill of rights that a proof-reader worth a damn would’ve mentioned:

The right to a free and uncensored Internet.

The right to an open, unobstructed Internet.

Free, uncensored, open, AND unobstructed? All four could’ve been put into a single line.

The right to gather and participate in online activities.

The right to create and collaborate on the Internet.

The right to freely share their ideas.

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The right to freely associate on the Internet.

Again, these four lines could’ve been condensed into a single line without losing anything. Failing that, at least crunch it down to two.

The right to equality on the Internet.

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The right to access the Internet equally, regardless of who they are or where they are.

Is this not redundant? One’s a vague generalization and the other is quite specific. If specifics are necessary, why include the general line?

An internet bill of rights is a long overdue idea. But it needs some fine-tuning. Fortunately, its open to constructive criticism. I’ll take them up on that later tonight.